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How it works
One script in. Four movements of coverage out, a printed PDF, and a link
you can hand to anyone. Here is every step, including the parts most tools leave out.
you
The script, and a few answers
A PDF or FDX, up to 20 MB. Before it runs: four questions
(draft stage, who is reading, what matters, how to read it) and an optional
note for the reader in your own words. Your answers become your defaults,
so you do not answer twice.
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Is there a story here?
A one-word triage: script, prose, or not a story.
or
Not a story → stop
Nothing is charged, and the file is deleted unread.
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pass 1
Data Processing
The LLM reads the whole script once and returns structure, not prose:
logline, genre, setting, keywords, and seven axes scored out of ten — each with a
short argument that has to cite a real scene. This is the spine every later pass
leans on.
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pass 2
The story
A chronological read of what happens, then profiles of the three to
five people who carry it.
pass 3
The notes
What works, and what to fix — one issue per paragraph, each with a
specific fix.
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pass 4
What it sits beside
Five comparisons, best first, with the reason and the box office.
Five good ones beat ten padded.
pass 5
The look
A palette pulled from the story's own world, so the report and its
PDF look like the script they came from.
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Assembled into four movements
The Read · Data Processing · The Story · The Notes. Ten sections,
grouped so a reader moves through it rather than scrolling a list.
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out
The report, in the browser
Scored and charted, with the people facing you.
out
A PDF, and a link
A printed report with a QR code that reopens it. Share the link with
anyone — they will not need an account.
The script is deleted the moment the report is assembled. Not after a
retention window, not archived first — the same request that writes the report blanks
the text. The PDF and the share link live only as long as the report does.
01What we can and cannot see
We cannot read your script, and neither can anyone who steals our database. Your
upload is encrypted before it is stored, the LLM reads it, and the same request
that saves your report destroys the script. An hour later the report and the PDF
go too. There is no log, no file, no admin screen, and nothing left to leak.
One honest limit: the machine that does the work can read your script while it is
working on it. That machine is ours, in our building — the LLM, the PDF, the
portraits, all of it. No provider sees your pages, because no provider is involved.
02The seven axes
Each scored out of ten, and each has to name a scene.
- The Protagonist — who we follow, and whether they are worth following.
- Story Engine — what drives it, and whether the pressure holds.
- The Voices — who sounds like a person and who sounds like a script.
- Freshness — what is new here, honestly.
- Pull — whether it holds you, and why.
- Point — what it is actually about.
- The Whole — the aggregate.
03What it will not do
Every tool has a floor. Here is ours, stated up front.
- It will not always be right. We run a verification pass that reads the
report back against the script and flags anywhere it contradicts the source. It
catches a good deal. It is not infallible, and a confident wrong sentence is the
failure mode you should expect before any other.
- It will not replace a reader who knows your market. It has read your
screenplay. It has not read the room.
- It will not invent a verdict for you. The score is an opinion with reasons
attached, not a measurement. Ask two readers and you will get two numbers.
- It is not an authority. It is a tool that read your pages and wrote down
what it noticed. That is all it is. Nothing here is a ruling, a grade, or a
permission slip — the verdict is a reader's opinion, and the only verdict that
matters comes from a person who hires, buys, or loves the thing you made.
- It is not your editor, and it is not your taste. Disagree with it. A
report that never makes you argue is a report you did not need. If it tells you
something you already believed, that is not confirmation — that is the cheapest
thing this kind of software does.
- It will not make you a better writer. Only writing, and time, and reading
people better than you, do that. This is one reader's notes, on one draft, once.
Use it that way and it is useful; use it as a mirror for how you feel about your
work and it will tell you what you want to hear.
04How often to use this
Not often. We would rather you did not.
A draft is not finished because a tool said so. It is finished because you decided
it was, and that decision needs time you cannot outsource — the sitting-with-it, the
reading it aloud, the part where nothing happens for a week and then one thing
clicks. Feedback you receive faster than you can act on it stops being feedback and
becomes noise you feel obliged to answer.
So we suggest running a script here on major revisions only — a draft you have
genuinely reworked, not each pass through the pages. If you find yourself uploading
nightly, that is usually a sign the tool has replaced your judgment rather than
supported it. That is the failure mode we would most like to avoid, because it is
the one that quietly makes writers worse.
We are not going to rate-limit you or hide the button. The restraint has to be
yours, and we would rather say so plainly than pretend a design choice is a policy.
Two related things we feel strongly about. This is not a tool for
writing with. It will not draft a scene, and it is not built to help you
generate one. It reads what you wrote. And do not run AI writing through it.
A report on a script a model produced is a model evaluating a model — a closed loop
that tells you nothing about your own work and a fair amount about how quickly a
tool can flatter one. If your pages came out of a chat window, this will not help
you, and we would rather tell you that than take the money.
We think these models are oversold, that they flatten writing more often than they
sharpen it, and that the best use of one is a small, occasional, honest second
opinion — not a chair you sit in. Please do not make ours a habit.
05You can change the prompts
The prompts are the product. They are yours to edit.
Every instruction sent to the LLM is readable and editable from your account — the
Data Processing pass, the notes pass, the house style, even the closing note. Change one and
the next run uses it. If you drive tools from an agent, there is an MCP server: an
agent can read what the pipeline sends, diff it against the default, and retune it for
you without a human opening a settings screen.
Most coverage products are a black box with a price. Ours is a box you can open.
~2 mintypical run, after payment clears
4movements, ten sections
0third parties that see your script
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